■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Topic : Spending time with family is more important than being at work. | |
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▶ Your Answer :
There has been a debate over whether
spending time with family is more important than being at work. I agree that
family should be a main concern for people for the two reasons. First, family
members can even advise about your problems. Second, people can stay in mental
shape better by spending time with their family.
First of all, people can get useful advices
from family members. In general, family members more know each other than any
others. Therefore, when people have difficult time in solving a problem like
dealing with friends relationship, Valuable advices are available to them by
discussing the problem with family. Let me take my cousin for an example. When
he was a first time to work at a company, he had demanding time in keeping good
relationships with his co-workers. At first, he tried to solve the problem by
consulting with other senior workers. However, actually, it was his father that
gave him very useful advices to him. Finally, my cousin told first to
co-workers with friendly smile and everything started to change. For this
regard, family members can give invaluable advices to other family members.
Second, family helps people to keep in shape
mentally. These days, working is harder than ever because workers are supposed
to face ever busier lives in and out of company. Therefore, maintaining health
is more important after all the works in a day. Spending time with family can
be a good method to relieve their stress and refresh their brain. In Korea
statistics department, a study shows that more time people spend with their
family, healthier people are than ever. The study also states that time with
family members plays a key role in relieving their stress and keeping their
mental health.
I strongly agree that family is more
important than work for the two reasons that I have mentioned above. First,
valuable advices can be available from family members. Second. Spending time
with family members can help people to keep in shape mentally. | |
쓰고 나니까 오프 토픽이네요좌절 ㅠ_ㅠ......
그리고 쓰던 형태만 계속 쓰는 것 같아서 또 좌절(표현이 생각 안나서 ..)
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