*진하게 표시한 부분은 제가 파악한 문단의 주요 내용이니 참고하세요^^
Where as the reading's passage discribes three reasons why the Egyptian civilization in 2200 to 2000 BC went into decline, the lecturer refutes to the points made in the reading's passage.
First, the lecturer says that it is highly unlikely for the provincial governors to rebel against Pharao because their positions were highly previleged. And the centeral government had a very powerful army, so that even if there was a turmoil aginst Pharao, it could can be easily controled. This refutes to the argue that was made in earlier reading's the passage that provincial governors are the reason for declining of Egyptian kingdom. 지방세력의 반란을 원인으로 보는 관점과 관련해 대립되는 두 지문의 내용을 잘 정리한 문단입니다.
Secondly, the speaker lecturer explains why it is unlikely that the severe drought and diseases caused disintegration of the Egyptian kingdom by pointing out that there was an a error in translating the document that was written by Egyptian chroniclers. 문서 해석의 error가 주장의 어떤점을 설명하는 근거인가에 대한 detail을 더 보완해주세요. The lecturer also says that drought had only confined in east region, so the damage was very low. This point is directly opposed to the second point in the reading's passage.
Last,, the lecturer also argues that Pharao Pepi's children's turmoil over the Pharao's succession can't be a direct reason for the deterioration of the Egyptian kingdom. It's true that there had been always struggle among siblings of pharaos over succession-because there were Pharaos whose reign was equally long. However, but because that the powerful central army had always at service, it can't be true that power struggle among Pepi's children had caused Egyptian kingdom's collapse. This contradicts the third point made by the writer. in the reading's passage. the lecturer, the reading passage의 표현을 계속 반복해서 사용하는 것보다는 다양한 단어를 활용해주는 것이 좋습니다. (the writer, the reading, the passage, the reading passage / the lecturer, the lecture, the speaker, the professor in the lecture 등)
전반적으로 내용 정리에 필요한 부분을 잘 노트테이킹해주신 것 같습니다. 각 문단의 point에 초점을 두고 대립되는 내용 역시 일목요연하게 잘 정리되어 있습니다. 글을 제출하기 전에 문법오류나 단어 활용 등을 체크할 수 있도록 시간 여유 남기면서 연습해주세요. 지문에서 사용한 문장을 그대로 인용하는 느낌이 나지 않도록 단어나 어순에 변형을 주어서 정리하는 것이 점수에 더 도움이 되니 참고하세요^^문제지의 답안과 직접 확인하셔서 노트테이킹에서 빠진 부분이나 잘못 이해된 부분은 없는지 다시 한 번 내용 체크해주시기 바랍니다. 수고 많으셨습니다^^화이팅!