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There might be Some people who (간결하고 확실한 표현방법이 제일 좋은 영어표현 방법입니다.) believe that developing many different skills is more (than이라는 단어는 비교형용사가 있어야지만 쓸수 있습니다)important than focusing on one skill when it comes to a personal success. However, I personally disagree with the above this idea for the two subsequent reasons. First, specialization is important to succeed. Moreover, it takes a lot of time to develop many different skills.
To begin with, to being (to be도 틀린 표현은 아니지만 앞서 to begin with로 시작했기에 반복적으로 보일수 있습니다.) a master of one specific field is important to succeed. This is due to the fact that we live in a modern and (두가지를 나열할땐 쉼표없이 and만 있으면 됩니다.) specialized era, which means that mastering one skill is more effective that than (비교법 사용시 than을 사용합니다.) developing many skills. Let me bring up my friend John's story as an example. He majored in electrical engineering, and he really focused on the subject in his entire campus life. As a result, the ability and skills on learned from his major made him enter Samsung company, a worldwide leading group in electric devices. If he hadn't had not (에세이에서 줄임표현은 안쓰시는게 좋습니다.) concentrated on his study on the subject, he could never (never의 위치는 not의 위치와 같습니다. he could not have이 맞는 표현이겠죠?) have never achieved the success.
In addition, you have to take a lot of time to develop many different skills. To be specific, the world these days requires a lot of things such as foreign languages, communication skills, computer skills and so on many more, (등등 이라는 의미를 표현할땐 and so on이라는 표현을 사용하세요) but there is just a limited time for us to develop all the things. Because of the limited time, we have to give up some of them. According to a recent study done by professor Kim in Seoul National University, it takes about 7 years for you to master one new language and 5 years to master all computer program skills. Consequently, you have to spend 12 years to have abilities about foreign language and computer skills. The study clearly shows that it is not suitable way to develop many different skills.
In conclusion, it is important to master one specific area to succeed, and there is not enough time to master all required skills. For these reasons, I firmly believe that to concentrate on one ability is important than to develop many different skills for a personal success. |