■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there is ample support for the author's
claim that functions of deer antlers can be fully explained by three theories.
On the other hand, the lecturer brings up several points that contradict (복수동사) this
argument.
First, the professor contends that it is unlikely that antlers are used
for sexual selection. This is because that male
deer make voices and pose body postures to attract their mates. Also, a recent study shows that female deer prefer deer with
small antlers. This casts doubt on the reading passage's suggestion that
antlers play a major role in finding mates.
Next, the professor insists that deer use scent for marking their
territory not visual marks. They scatter strong secretions on the trees to warn to other males. In addition, rubbing their
antler against trees is to remove their soft skin, not
create marks. This refutes the reading passage's claim that deer make
marking to indicate their areas.
Finally, the professor argues that it is doubtful that antlers allow
deer to defend themselves against predators. Deer have risks of being attacked (수동태가 더 적절합니다.) from
wolves in all year. However, their antlers shed during the winter and they cannot protect themselves in this period although
they were weaker. Also, the female deer usually raise their calves, but
they do not have antlers. This counters the reading passage's assertion that
antlers are effective shields for deer.
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1. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
2. reading and listening의 비율이 너무 listening쪽으로만 치우쳐져 있습니다.
비율은 5:5, 적어도 6:4 정도는 되어야 합니다.
이는 리딩에 대한 디테일 부족으로 이어지며, 분량 부족, 추가 설명 실패 등으로 이어질 수 있으니
리딩에서도 evidence를 많이 찾아서 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다.
3. body paragraph의 분량을 전체적으로 증량해주시기 바랍니다.
4. 문법은 대체적으로 깔끔한 편입니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*