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Some people say
that creativeness is not a crucial element for a person to become a great
person at their work or study. However, in my opinion, I think to be successful
person, they should be creative for the following subsequent reasons.
To
begin with, things that has improved workplace is created by people who are
ingenious ingenious people improve the working condition. Many good ideas, which is attributable to significant changes come
from someone’s creativeness. While others think it is wrong or time consuming,
world changers try to suggest new development. For instance, Michael Hawthorn,
the owner of car manufacturing company, had always thought about the way to
maximize employees’ productivity. When he suggested some unprecedented methods,
such as adjusting light, changing entire organization structure, many people
considered these as ridiculous. However, it eventually turned out to be potent
way to raise company’s overall income and is made use by almost a lot of
enterprises in these days.
On
top of that, creative students are more likely to get better grade than
ordinary students can get better grade. The reason being is that they Students (the reason being은 적절한 표현이 아닙니다) usually find the ways they
study better themselves with their undetectable thinking. They study more
efficiently with their own study know-how. For example, I have seen a lot of
smart students interviewing on TV to introduce the students who finally
succeeded to enter good universities. When I see them, I was surprised that
they were studying in the way I never have done before. They set essential
purpose of their study and figured out the methods that best fit in to their
qualities.
To
sum up, creativeness gives people many opportunities to be credible to better accomplished at their work and students who are more eccentric than others
usually get better academic results. In this regard, I agree with the statement
that people must be creative to be successful at their work or the study.
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