■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Some people think that parents should spend a lot of time playing games or sports with their children. Others think that parents should devote more time doing schoolwork with them. Which do you think is better? |
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▶ Your Answer : Some people might think that parents should devote more time doing schoolwork with them (them이 누구인가요?) than spending a lot of time playing games or sports with their children. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for the two subsequent reasons. First, playing with children affects on their life significantly. Second, children could be stressed out by their parents.
To begin with, personality is made by parents in their childhood. The emotional relationship between parents and children is an important issue all over in their life. Playing games or sports gives a lot of chances for them to build a robust relationship. There is a survey that shows people to significance of these things. (이 부분이 무슨 뜻인지 모르겠어요.) The 64D institution investigated that how parents’ partnership affects on children's personality formation. One group that had much time to play with their parents was 78% higher in their positive action and also their academic performances were better than the other group. Consequently, this result means that forming good disposition of children is based on having enjoyable time with their parents.
On top of that, it can be a stress for their children to do (to 부정사) schoolwork with their parents. Children already study with their teachers in their school. After finish their school, they have to rest at their home. However, if parents give their children pressure or keep watching them, they could be stressed out, and it can ultimately lead to break of their relation. One of my friends is in this case. She was very positive and active until she was seven years old. However, her parents started to interfere in her schoolwork and gave a large amount of stress. Therefore, she got angry and fled from home, and also her personality was deteriorated. She said that it was very horrible to receive a large amount of stress from their parents.
To sum up, playing with their children is helpful for forming a great personality of children. Moreover, when parents devote too much of (전치사) their time in schoolwork, it can cause more severe problems. In this regard, I firmly believe that parents should spend a lot of time playing games with their children.
Q. 혹시 저 밑줄그은 affects 가 문법적으로 말이 안되는건가용?? 자꾸 빨간줄이 떠서요ㅜㅜ Q. 이번주에 시험인데 시간에 자꾸 쫓겨서 오류확인할 시간이 없네요ㅠㅠ(이건 오류 수정한 글이에요ㅜㅜ) 혹시 시간을 줄일 수 있는 팁이 있을까요...?ㅜ0ㅜ
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1. have effects on 땡땡 / affects 땡땡 이라고 씁니다.
affects는 동사이고 뒤에 전치사가 따로 붙지 않습니다.
2. 에세이 쓰시기 전에 시험장에서 나누어 주는 종이에
대충 essay structure을 연필로 쓰시고 그거에 맞춰서 써주세요.
만약 시간이 너무 없다면 템플릿을 활용하시는 것도 하나의 팁입니다.
3. 사소한 문법 오류가 (아직도) 굉장히 많은 편입니다.
전치사와 관련된 오류에 주의해주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*