It is often said that playing computer game is a waste of time. It is true that playing computer game releases stress from hard studying, and I believe that playing computer game brings negative effects on education and health.
First of all, playing computer game interferes with school works. According to the Ministry of Education of Korea, 60% of middle school and high school students are addicted to playing game including video game and computer game and their school grade is lower than other students who do not play computer games. It is obvious that students who spending spend too much time on playing game might not have enough time to study such as homework and research. For example, my brother was really good at science and he liked to reading read academic books. However, since he started to play computer games, he lost his interest on the science and finally he got low grade on his science test. I strongly believe that playing computer game is a waste of time.
Secondly, playing game brings harmful effects to people like myopia and obesity. In modern society, there are many people wearing glasses and many people having trouble with obesity. This is due to the fact that playing they play computer games. When people play a computer game, they usually look at computer monitor more than two hours without any moving movement. According to the research, people who look at computer monitor more than one hour every day have worse eyesight than people who did not. Additionally, it is said that playing computer game demotivates people to exercise. It is obvious that playing computer game is not necessary because it brings severe negative effect on people.
In conclusion, I think that playing computer game is waste of time because it brings harmful effect on people because it lowers school grade and it worsens health.
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