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Being creative VS planning carefully
In the past, a lot of companies had employed workers that have skills in their job. The reason is that a large number of companies had mass-produced producing systems for their products, which have same features and functions under this system. However, this trend has greatly changed because customers have wanted to get more special and distinguish things to be differentiation differentiated in comparison with others. This is saying that the best results are induced from being creative, not from planning about something. Therefore, I firmly believe that people are able to get better consequences, when they are creative. The reason is simple because planning carefully cannot plan up to unexpected situations perfectly and surprising results come from human creativity.
앞에 skilled workers 얘기, 대량생산과 창의성 얘기는 가 reason으로 이어졌으면 좋겠지만,
끊기고 상관없는 reason이 와서 아쉽네요~
The first reason is that people can put on unplanned situations, even if they are efforts to prevent varieties. By the way, in this situation, plan-centered people get embarrass easily, while people who have creative ability deal with the problems to find other ways instantly. For example, when I was a college student, I applied a writing contest in my school. At the time, I selected expected questions that had a higher tendency of being on the test. of questions, and studied these topics carefully for several days. However, totally different questions were taken in upsetting my expectation. As a result, I did not get any prize. On the other hand, my friend who had creativity won the contest in spite of he did not prepare this contest.
Furthermore, great works often result in human creativity. Especially, human beings have received lots of helps from scientists' inventions and an amount of them came from scientists' creativities. The best example of this is a metallic print. Before AD 100, people used only wood-types for prints in Korea. Thus people should wait for a long time to gain prints because it had too slow printing speed and also many people had to cave letters on wood blocks for printing. Although many people challenged to invent alternative things, they were failure every time. Chul Su Kim, a prominent inventor in medieval Korea, invented the metallic print by chance when he observed a blacksmith's workshop. He tried to invent it and finally she completed the metal type. If he did not have creativity, we might lose one of big inventions in the world.
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뜻전달이 불명확해질 정도인 경우도있습니다.
고치기가 매우 애매해서 표시하다가 안했지만,
뜻전달이 확실한 문장만들기를 연습하시면 좋을듯 싶습니다. :)