■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :The telephone has had a greater effect on people's lives than the telephone has.
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What do you think has had a greater influence on people's lives; television or telephone? Some people might think that the telephone has, because the telephone was developed at earlier time period than the television, and it started affecting people earlier than the television did. However, the television was, is, and will be affecting people than telephone because it provides more credible information than phone does, and also because the television industry provide jobs for a lot of people.
To begin with, news are significant, accurate, recent, and dependable reports of this society. The television often shows live situations that is happening at the moment people are watching. Also the situation is analyzed and narrated by professionals, and is very objective. In contrast, the phones provide infomation said by normal people, which means that the information can be subjective and sometimes exaggerated. Once, my cousin called me and said that she had heard that her favorite singer was ill and about to die. I was surprised, but soon found out on tv that the singer was ill, and that was all. There was nothing about death, and few days later, the singer recovered, so my cousin got really happy and embarrassed at the same time.
In addition, the television industry can revive the economy by providing jobs for people. The television industry is still developing and there are many chances that there will be new types of television still being studied. For the study, or even for the simple mechanical work. there needs to be a lot of people working for it. And as the number people needed increases, it will revive the economy to provide jobs for people with no job, or to compete in order to get better workers and pay them with more salary.
To sum up, the news reports that television provides are more objective and reliable, and the television has had a great effect on the economy. Hence, it is probably the television that has had more influence on people's lives than the telephone has. | |
그런데 이 책 모범에세이 보면 대부분 시작을 most people think----. However, I think ----. 이런 식으로 나가잖아요.
그런 평범한거 말고 새롭고 참신한 시작을 하려면 어떻게 할때 제가 한것처럼 살짝 질문형식으로 시작해도 될까요?
그리고 제가 궁금한 또 다른것은, 제 엄마는 이런 시험을 잘 보려면 모범에세이를 거의 와우다시피 하는게 좋다는데, 제가 생각하기에 전 답안에 나오는 틀에 박힌거 말고 쓰고 싶은 말이 너무 많거든요? 하지만 또 어떻게 보면 확실히 답안지가 훨씬 좋은 에세이로 보일때도 있고... 어떻게 할까요?
또, 저는 쓸말이 많다고 생각했어도 300단어가 안될때도 많아요.. (요번거는 운좋게도 340이지만) 꼭 300단어 정도는 되야지 effective essay 인가요?