Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television has a negative effect on children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Today , Television is a very essential media to all people if they are at a young age or old age. However , watching television is not always beneficial to human , whareas(=> whereas) they spend much time on viewing TV. (whereas는 두가지를 비교할 때 쓰며, ~인 반면에로 해석됩니다. 이 문장의 경우 인관관계로써, because 나 as가 적당합니다..) First , a wide range of TV companies broadcast many bad programs through some cable channels. It provides bad effects to childrens who does not have ability to judge what is right or wrong. Second , It can make children addicted to it and it causes a bad well-being problem(???) to children because they would watch TV more than going outside to play. In sum of all (=> For these reasons), I don't agree that TV has more advantages than its disadvantages.
As I previously stated, there is(=>are) not only good companies out there, but also many bad companies around the world. such a bad companies in TV, they don't actually consider about their contents of program but they only focus on their prosperity rather than its bad influence to a little kids. For example, When I was a child, I used to play, that I had watched(=>watching) on the TV channel with my friends. although It was about fighting or hitting someone, I didn't think that it wasn't bad that much. therefore It can be very dangerous for children to watch TV, especially who are usually alone in home. they need to be cared by their parent.
In addition , Watching television make children not enable to be healthy and finally, It leads children to fatty person because its addictive contents tie them down infront of TV rather than going outside. actually, this problem can be seen easily in our surrounding. There are so many children who are overweight is out there though they are just seven or eight ages.(=> years old) It is said that is from not only our food habits but also our spending time for watching TV makes them fat. For instance, I attended the high school which is placed on countryside and there was no TV anywhere. during this school life, I usually played outside, whereas I spent my time for watching TV before I attend (attending) the highschool. I think the circumstance in the highschool makes (=>made) me more active and brisk man at that time
Therefore, TV can be either beneficial or most problem (=> harmful) (either A or B 에서 AB는 같은 형태가 와야 합니다.) in our society. maybe it is hard to live without TV which offers us many informative and important news but we should be able to gaze at its serious drawback so that we may prevent the disadvantage of TV program and make them available media in spite of its all (=> all its) harmful things in our lives.