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Since there are too much works to do, some people think we don’t have enough time to enjoy our leisure. But However,(But을 문장 시작할때 쓰는건 좋지 않습니다) I have a different opinion. I think that leisure hours will increase as the time goes by because of due to some reasons. The place for leisure is increasing fast, and lots of useful products help our work, so works that we have to do will decrease.
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To begin with, there are more places to enjoy my free time. In the past, we had to go far to do some outdoor activities. On the other hand, we can easily go to those places in these days because it is not far away these days. For example, people often go to outdoor swimming pools in during summer vacation, and I also go there every year. Few years ago, there were not many outdoor swimming pools so I had to go to Seoul to find them. Since it took too many much time, I thought it was waste of time. But However nowadays, there are lots of outdoor swimming pools near Changwon such as California beach located in Kyeongju. So,Therefore(So를 문장 시작할 떄 쓰는건 좋지 않아요) I usually go to near places instead of going to Seoul. In the past, I could only go there once a year, but now I often go there with my friends or families. Like this, there are lots of places for my leisure such as swimming pool, ski resort, ice-skating rink etc.
On top of that, there are several things that helps our work and reduces time to of working. Before these useful inventions were made, people had to do their whole work by themselves which took too much time. But However, in these days, some products do some works instead of us, so that we don’t have to care about it. For instance, I heard that people in the past washed their clothes by hand because there was no washing machine. However, nowadays, we just have to put our clothes in the machine and add put the detergent in. Laundry became much more convenient comparing compare to the past. This shows us that lots of helpful machines replace us and do all the works for us.
To sum up, I believe that people will be enjoying enjoy leisure much more as the time goes by because the places to have leisure increases, and inventions that help our work are made. Leisure time is very important in our lives because it can help us to get rid of stress from the work. I hope that people use their leisure time effectively.
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