Exams encourage students to learn. |
It is often said that exams help students to learn. Some people might disagree with this statement because grades are not all the things. (grades do not tell us every aspect of student이렇게 하면 어떨까요? thing 은 쓰지 않아야 할 단어중 하나로 알고 있거든요)Creativity and personal experiences are another matters of encourage(of 뒤에는 명사형태로 와야하지 않나요? encouraging) students to learn. However, I agree that exams encourage students to learn. It provides participate in classes and review class (바로전에 encourage라는 단어가 나왔으니까 allow students to learn 혹은 enables이라는 단어는 어떨런지요?)materials by themselves. --->그리고 provide 사람 with~ 이런식으로 쓰는 단어니까요. it provides them with participation ~~~이렇게 쓰시면 좋을듯) To begin with, exams encourage(동일한 단어를 반복하시지 마시고 바꾸세요 enable, provide, allow make...) students take actively participate in classes. As one might expected, competition causes hard study between students. It encourage motivate their maximize focus on classes. This is because they advance notice take exam(무슨 뜻인지 잘 몰겠네요), so they get hard study to get a (생략 뒤에 복수로 쓰셨으니까)good grades. To demonstrate, according to DongIlbo in 2007, one of the most popular newspapes (복수여야함) company(생략해도 될듯) in In addition, exams should students review their classes materials. (should 뒤에는 동사가 나와야하지요. 그런데 학생이라는 명사가 나왔습니다. 이렇게 하심은 어떨지요? exams make students review...)To get good grades they must review their class sources. They notice(realize 는 어떨지..) cramming is hard, so they regularly review class materials. For example, when I was middle school student, I was usually cramming study in order to taking(to 뒤에는 원형와야지요 take) exam. This is because exam subject was my favorite subject. However, I disappointed at my lower grades than I expected. Thus I notice craming is how really different and regularly review is the finest way to get a good grades. To make a long story short, I believe that exams encourage students to learn. As I early mentioned, it provides students with self motivation and they should (조동사 뒤에는 동사가 와야지요?)regularly their class materials. How do(생략..의문문 아니므로..) a person get a good grade just cram study in only one day. |
이렇게 적었습니다. 여러 고수님의 첨삭 부탁드립니다.
급하게 적은거라 글자수가 모자라네요.. 좋은 하루 되세요. ^^
: 일단 기본적으로 문법이 약하십니다.
문법을 좀 챙기셔야할것같구요. 문장이 이해가 안되는 것과 계속 반복되는 문장이 너무 많습니다. 글을 많이 써보시되 첨삭을 받으셔야할것 같아요. 잘못을 모르는채 많이 쓰기만 해도 효율적이지는 않으니까요.
도움이 조금이라도 되시길 바랍니다.