문제: Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations are important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
Some people may wonder the reason why there are many groups or organizations in our societies. Some could think they’re not necessary in lives. However, I believe there are several reasons that explain why they were made. Let me illustrate two reasons below.
To begin with, being a member of a group helps people develop social skills. In other words, people can learn how to accept different ideas and behaviors from others, gathering with many people to achieve a goal of a group. I have experience on that. I was a youth member of an organization, I could learn how to deal with difficult situations, spending time with senior members. Thus, I believe it’s helpful to improve one’s social skills.
In addition, a group helps many people reach a successful goal. When people become members of one organization, they would have its own unique goal. Two people are better than one. When people gather for one purpose, they can give themselves a huge power. We can see many efforts showing what I’ve just mentioned. Many college students make groups to speak for themselves about school’s regulations that don’t make any sense. Therefore, I believe groups help people get their goals.
I have come to the conclusion that groups or organizations have advantages for people. Due to these reasons, I believe that those should exist in our societies.
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