▶ Your Answer : Some people could think that life has become harder since when our grandparents were young, however, I strongly believe that life has become more comfortable and easier nowadays. This is because of the 'development of technology'.
We are currently living in the fourth industrial revolution era where technology follows us wherever we go. We are exposed to smart phones, computers, artificial intelligence and many more, that were not present when our grandparents were young. The major reason why to I believe that the development of technology has benefited our modern lives is because of the different its fast and effective feature of accessing to a lot of ways to access information in the modern society. For example, as a student that is a senior in high school, it is very important for me to find educational resources to study for upcoming school events and exams. The process of finding finding educational resources is very easy for me as I can find necessary information with a few clicks on the keyboard on my laptop. However, I have heard from my own grandparents that when they were younger, they had to visit few libraries to find related books on the topics they were studying.
On top of that, another reason to why I believe that technological development has truly benefited us is because of the improved communication between individuals. Although telephones did exist when my grandparents were young, they were too heavy to carry around in public, so they could only call when they were at home. Therefore, although it was able for my grandparents to communicate with could talk to others on the phone at home, it was hard to communicate with others outside of their house. However, nowadays, we have smartphones that are small and light for us to carry around. We are not only able to communicate with others easily, but we are also able to access information at any time, anywhere with our smartphones, listen to music, and even find the direction to go to places.
Although there are disadvantages and many dangers associated with technological development such as phone and gaming addiction, and many people losing lose their eyesight because of the bright phone screens, it is undeniable that technology has improved our lifestyle to be more comfortable and easier. In conclusion, responding to the question, I agree with the following statement that life is more comfortable and easier nowadays compared to when our grandparents were young.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3 | 2 | 3 | Score | Fair 18-23 |
- 아이디어나 근거가 대체적으로 simple하여 다소 아쉬운 글입니다.
- educational resources란 정확히 무엇을 나타내는 것인가요?
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