In the past, people needed to make extended families for their survival because their main tasks were agriculture. Usually, agriculture demands many kinds of physical labors, so extended family’s members had to should help other family’s member. 여기서 갑자기 다음문장으로 넘어가는 느낌이에요 ~ 연결이 안되요 . In the past, when agriculture was their main task, the role of extended family was huge. However, nowadays, not many people work in the agricultural industry and therefore However, in my point of view, the extended family is not as important as it was in the families’ importances are less rather than past. 이런식으로 고쳐주시면 좋을것같아요 ~ ^^
To begin with, today, people have diverse conveniences for their lives,so extended families’ duties are less 덜 ?? than past. so the duties of the extended families are less important than the past. less 뒤에 형용사가 와야해요 :) In the past, when parent went go out to work on their works, extended family’s members such as as grand mothers or aunts took care of their children, and they felt responsibilty that they should took care of children. However, 현재니까 this is not the case these days. it was not case in today. For example, today, if parents arefeel busy or both of parents have their jobs, they can employ a babysitter, or they can send their children to daily care center. Moreover, parents can use these services by just one call. calling. This example shows that dutied duties and chores once done by extended family’s members are replaced through other employees or conveniences.
Second, today, extended family’s members live too far away from other family’s member. Futhermore, people earn enough money through diverse their job, so they do not require help to other exetened family’s members than past. For example, my aunt live in Canada and she is nurse. Her main tasks are repoting and caring of patients. She earn enough money for her survival through her job. Although her extended family’s members live in Korea, She does not have difficulties, and she does not require help to other extended family’s members for her life. This example explains that even if extended family’s members live far away, people do not receive other effects in their lives. This example demonstrates that since many family members live far away/separately, the influence of family members are less significant than the past.
*바디2는 잘못하면 오프토픽될수도 있을것같아요. 돈을 따로 벌기때문에 상관이 없다고 하는 것보다, 요즘은 멀리 떨어져서 사는 가족들이 많기 때문에 과거보다 가족들의 영향이 줄었다. 이런식으로 쓰면 더 좋겠어요. 이모가 멀리 살기 때문에 나한테 미치는 영향이 거의 없다, 일년에 한번 볼까말까 하고 자주 못보는데 거의 이런 가족이 많다.. 따라서 과거보단 대가족이 덜 중요하다. :)
In brief, today, people do not receive help from extended families than past because they can use diverse survices for their children, they can earn enough money for their survival, and extended family’s members live far away from other member. Finally, I strongly believe that this trends will continue, and the extended family’s importances will be to decrease. |