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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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University athletic apartment should receive the same amount of funding as university libraries. | |
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These days, many people say that university should invest more money to improve the library. However, I believe that athletic departments need the same amount of investment as the library receives. First, it new athletic facilities can help improve student’s physical health. Second, exercise makes students foster their social skills.
Above all, increase of investment in athletic department results in improvement of student’s health. University usually do not have many has little work out machines, and place to play baseball fields or and basketball courts. Therefore, students have had some limits to do exercise. If the university provides more financial assistance to the athletic department part, they can offer more facilities which is needed to do physical activities. Take my brother’s school as an example: the university did not have lots of place, machines, and implements to work out, so many students could not do exercise as much as they wanted to do. However, after the school invested some money to solve the problems, they came to do all kinds of games and exercises. At that time, according to the research done by my brother’s school, there was advancement in of the student’s health states. As this example illustrates, the more university offers money to student’s physical activities the stronger student’s physical states become are.
Second the university can expect to reinforce student’s social skills when they invest in the athletic department. During the game, students learn about the unique things that they can not learn through some books or classes. To be specific, when they play a game with other friends, they should not only compete with the friends but also cooperate. It gives students many lessons at every moment when they play a game and do exercise. They can be taught about the value of forgiveness, a sense of achievement, and the method to cooperate cooperation with others. A recent study shows that students who play a game with their friends more than once a week have two times more friends than that the students who do not are not play a game at all do. As this study demonstrates, by playing a game and doing exercise, students are able to get along with each other and foster their social skills.
In conclusion, athletic department should receive money as much money as the library receives. The investment will contribute a lot to the betterment of students' health finally can decrease student’s illness and make the atmosphere to practice their social relationship. For these reasons, the university should seriously consider be concerned about the investment to athletic agency. | |
시험이 얼마 안남은 지랑 시간나는 대로 많이 쓰려고 하고 있으요^^
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