Many people consider a single trip as a tough ting which only need much energy in many aspects.
However, in my opinion, travelling alone is preferable to doing together for these reason : gain a valuable lesson and provide a true trip.
To begin with, people can learn a something valuable in a single trip. This is because people should organize plan and deal with challenges on their own. By doing so, people can a lesson in how to cope with problems that they face. For example, I once visitied Jeju-island in korea. Eventhough I did the reserch about the island and planned my schedule thoroughly, something i didn't expected happened. But by overcoming problems wisely, I could become muture in many ways such as personality and experience.
In addition, Guided tour is not good as perceived because it's limiting visitors' behavior. That is, it's resrictive and include only tourist attractions. In particular, some people cannot take a time and explore places because of tight schedule. But if they travelled alone, they could fully enjoy their visiting and make fond memories. So, by taking a single trip, people can avoid many disturbances such as the time limit and selection of place.
In brief, i prefer a single trip to a guided tour because of many merits it provide. People can take enough time and fully appreciaate the site, in addition to learning a lesson in how to deal with unexpected probles. Travel can make a big difference depending on how you do it.
문장구조랑 전개 방식은 좋은 편이에요.
문법이랑 오타랑 단어선택(single trip같은..)이 고칠점이 많네요;ㅅ;
전개는 좋은데 구체적이지 못한게 흠인듯해요.
바디1의 예도 어떤문제가 있었는데 어떻게 해결했다~ 간결하면서도 구체적인 내용이 들어가게 쓰면 더 좋겠구요, 바디2는 두문장 정도에 쓸수있는 내용을 지나치게 풀어쓴 느낌이 드네요. 지금 쓰신 내용을 조금 간추리고 example을 추가해서 써주세요 ~
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