Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In modern society, people are so busy that they don't have enough time to cook. This lead to simplifying of cook. Some people think that traditional cook is better than cook that prepare easily. However, as food has become easier to prepare, people live are improved in many ways. It helps people to save time and moreover it also provides people abundant nutrients to people.
쿡쿡쿡 해대시니까 정신이 없어요..ㅠㅠ
This lead to simplifying of cook.도 괜찮지만..저는
This lead in a simplification of cooking process. 아니면 simplifed in cook뭐..이런식으로할듯.
people live?? 말이..좀..아닌듯. living standard라고하시거나 level of life....아니면 그냥 people's life
Firstly(First of all), people can save time as food that is made easily lessens cook time (이런 표현법 처음본..듯?). Before, people had to spare much more time to cook. The reason is simple, they had no appropriate instruments such as sharp knife and small spoon. Imagine, if you have to cook with blunt knife, it takes long time and it is so ineffective. However nowadays food has become easier to prepare for convenient tools. Thus cook time is shortened and people enjoy another activities during the time that should have spend cooking originally. In other word, people have much leisure time. They spend the time doing hobbies like reading books, playing game, listening music. We cannot help saying that it improved human lives.
Firslty...보다는 First of all이나 To begin with,이 낳을듯.
Second에나 ly 붙여주시고요.
...도구 이야기는좋은데...왜 하필 칼이랑 스푼일까요? 칼은..석기시대부터 있었던듯.. 돌칼...
도구...를 말하면서 뭐.... 전자레인지, 가스레인지 이런거 하시는게 좋을듯.
Not only that, but easily preparing food(표현 바꾸세요) is helpful for health. Easily preparing food means that people could get material easily. Fifty years ago, people couldn't imagine eating fruits in winter (너무 확신에 찬듯한거랄까요.. reference가 있는거두 아니고.. 사실적이지 못한). Sometimes they suffered lack of nutrition. They had to cook with the right season's material. Nowadays, we can easily get watermelon in winter. We can purchase a special product that is turned out in special region. Also we have artificial addition. Those not only help people cook easily but also provide bountiful nutritions. For instance, I use some addition that contains nutrition such as calcium because nutrition occasionally is destroyed with fire. Thank to the addition, I can obtain calcium. Improving live absolutely includes improving health.
seasonal fruit에 대해 말씀하시고싶으신건가요?
전치사, 시제...표현법 공부하시는게 좋을듯해요.
전....이만 낮잠자러;;