It is often said that the more friends people hang out with, the better it is for them. It is not quite a wrong idea. However, I firmly believe that going out with a close friend is funnier and better for them people because with a close friend, we can have a deep conversation and play together without a conflict.
To begin with, by spending time with a close friend, we can do many fun things together without a fight. This is attributed to the fact that by having known each other for a long time, a my close friend can know and understand me better than other friends. Not only that, as times goes by, close friends will think each other very comfortable. (end up의 뉘앙스는 문장의 흐름상 잘 어울리는 것 같지 않아요) end up feeling each other comfortable. By knowing each other better and feeling comfortable when they are together, they are unlikely to fight when they play together. (두 문장을 콤마하나로 이을 수는 없어요. 앞의 문장에 transition이 가능한 전치사, 절 등이 포함되어야 다음 문장으로 이어질 수 있습니다.) For example, Jun Kim, one of my close friends, can exactly figure out various things about me, such as my favorite sports or entertainers, what I the most like to do in my free time, and which behaviors I hate. He always suggested an alternative way to attenuate my feeling when I was in bad mood after he made me upset (문장에 꼭 필요한 부분이 아니고, confusion을 초래할 수 있으니 안쓰는게 좋을 것 같아요) because he knew what the problem was. I think such understanding is was the most important component for hanging in order to hang out with friends without any conflict. This implies that by playing with a close friends, they will have lower chance to fight, feeling comfortable.
In addition, with a closer friend, we can have a deeper conversation than when we are with a number of friends. This is due to the fact that if a person (one 쓰는게 더 좋을 것 같아요) goes out with numerous friends, a variety of conversation is was made at once and it is a little bit difficult for one to concentrate concentration on every talk. For instance, when I was in fifth grade, I had seven friends in class. For During early period, we got along with well without a problem. However, later on, we got happened to have a more and more conflict because we could not share all things among seven friends and also it was actually impossible to satisfy all members' taste at the same time. One plans A plan that was preferred by one is was not acceptable for others. Hence, finally our group was finally divided into several sub-groups which are is the same as the concept of spending time with a closer friend. It was the time when that I could have a deeper conversation with one close friend without a distraction. We were able to concentrate concentration on one another's talk unless because other members did not intervene. (unless에는 not의 의미가 포함되어 있기 때문에 unless 다음에 부정문이 오면 안되요) This experience suggests that with one close friend, we can have better time, sharing a deep-thought.
In brief, it looks that playing with only one friend is not attractive and funny. However, unlike such common idea, it is really a good way to spend valuable time, feeling comfortable without a conflict and having a deep conversation.
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