▶ Your Answer : There are different opinions regarding the way to learn about a foreign country. Personally, I strongly believe that reading articles from the country is not effective way to study about a foreign country. In the following paragraph,I will explain detailed and logical reasons for my opinion. for the following two subsequent reasons.
Most of all, the reason why reading newspapers is not best way is there are other best way to learn about other country. To begin with, there are alternative ways to learn country (이유는 간결하게 서술하시길 바랍니다) A typical one of them is to go abroad to the country for a several time. People will be able to make friends who live in there. They will introduce about their country and culture, which people can expand their horizons. Then, people People can understand deeply the country by sharing emotions and feeling with friends. However, if people only read books, they cannot experience this. The reality and theory are so different. People who learn only theory through the article cannot understand their culture completely.
On top of that, Only reading books is very boring reading book is boring (뭔가 이 이유는 적절치 않는 거 같습니다). This way makes it easy to possible that people lost their interest to lose interest in foreign country. in fact, the way makes the people should be participate in their study more actively like by watching TV or going new area (이 문장이 하려고 하는 것이 무엇인가요? 이해가 되지 않습니다). For example, people can directly go to traditional place by going abroad. So, they can remember well the place and historical meaning longer than only reading books. It is more helpful in studying about a foreign country. On the other hand, if people only read the articles, it is not effective because they cannot feel the atmosphere in the place.
For the reasons mentioned above, reading newspapers or magazines from the country is not best way because the other ways like going directly have more benefits than the given statements.
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