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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :Being happy with a job is more important than having a high salary. | |
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Second, people who have a job with a high salary could be unhappy because they do not satisfy are not satisfied with their work. There are many people who had been committed suicide because of a depression. According to Korean times, 7 percent of the people who killed themselves is earn a lot of money with their work. who earns a lot of money in their job. They were not happy and always suffered from their work. Therefore, the happiness and satisfaction are the most important factors to have a job.
In conclusion, I definitly believe that earing a lot of money is not important to choose a job. We have to consider about how much we can enjoy and be satisfied with satisfy about that job. If people only consider about the only money, finally they will realize that they were wrong.
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