0001 (EX) People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my country, most of the high school students enter the university although the tuition is very expensive. Some people believe that attending a university is important to getting a good job. However, in my opinion, university is a place where people can improve their academic level not a middle process for joining a good company.
The first reason is that the stage as a university student is the only period to study something deeply in our life. We have studied about a wide spectrum of study from elementary to high school student. And through the experience of these times, we selected a best subject to study at the university. Usually we learn about that field of study for 4 years. Through all period of our life, there would be a no time spending only for studying. After graduating university, we have to work and work continuously until we become an old man. At elder stage we are able to have a lot of leisure time. But at that time, if we want learn new knowledge it would be a big challenge because our brain would become also old. For example, my grandfather regrets that he didn’t study hard when he was university student. He thought that university stage is time for experiencing new culture and he spent whole his time to enjoy and play. Now he always says to me that studying hard, now I want to study but it’s impossible to me since I’m old man and it’s hard to remember something new.
On top of that, it is very happy to enhance academic level. People often feel a proud of oneself whenever they achieve something through their continuous and enthusiastic effort. And the extend of proud is bigger and bigger as the matter is harder. Of course learning and making a new knowledge to mine is too hard process. Therefore the pleasure of study is bigger in proportion to the difficulty. To take a personal experience, I’ve studied about a geology for 2 years. In this field of study, it includes many parts of study such as physics, chemistry, and optics and so on. So at first time studying geology seems like a big barrier of my life and I was frustrated for many times. However after passing sort of time I can see myself who grow up as a real scholar. (얼마간의 시간 후에 after passing sort of time 맞나요?)
In short, I strongly believe that attending a university is for increasing knowleadge not for just job. Because it’s a precious stage of our life to study something deeply, and as learning more and more we can experience big pleasure of study. I want many university students to spend their university time to increase their academic level rather than just prepare to get a good job.
아,, 워드로 치다보니 너무 길어졌네요. 대체 이게 몇자일런지 ;ㅁ;
귀찮으시겠지만 그래도 꼼꼼한 첨삭 부탁드립니다. ^^
그런데 시간 조절이 안되서 큰일이네요
한동안 에세이를 안쓰다가 써서 그런지
타이핑도 잘 안되고 생각이 정리가 안되고, 문법적으로 연결도 잘 안되고,, 에고
그래서 시간초과 무려 30분 했답니다 ㅠㅠ