▶ Your Answer :I believe that movies or television negatively influence people. Everyone knows and they call it “stupid box.”
Let’s have look at why it is.
Majority people used to read books before the media gained popularity. Reading a book is the only way to learn and gain new knowledgeß사실상 똑 같은 말, however, nowadays Media has prevailed our society,
and “reading” has become less entertaining to many youngsters. It is due to the
fact that it is easily accessible to wide arrange of people with great handiness.
This is to say, you can easily absorb into a few hundreds of information a day without
putting in any efforts. Thus, movies and television have influenced and
attracted many people.
Of course, movies
and television provide lots information, yet I believe these are not as useful and well-organized than books. T.V.
and movies advertise whatever it takes to get more viewers, which often contains
inappropriate and stimulating scenes that has negative effects on viewers,
especially for growing children.
In addition, on
research I read before, the media is
bad for enhancing children’s concentration. It shown that the children who watch TV over 4 hours a day had bad result on test than others who rarely watch TV. Watching
TV and movies will decrease the one’s
ability to concentrate, and you can easily see from the medical experiments
that those kids who have been watching T.V a lot have low performance in
overall area, including working and studying.
Another reason is that people are
sometimes addicted to watching movies or television. The person who is addicted
to the media tends to be
obsessed with the channel he or she likes. Even though they have heavy task that they have to do,
they are indifferent to their obligation. Thus, They eventually failed to succeed in their career.
As you can see, watching movies or
television can have serious effects on people’s behavior. Therefore, reading book is much more beneficial than
watching T.V.
최대한 I 에 관한건 빼고 반복되는 내용이 많는것 같내요. 단어선택은 아직 초급이신데 틀린 단어는 아니지만 그래도 높은 점수를 받으시려면 그래도 약간은 academic한 단어로 바꾸면 더 높은 점수를 받으실듯해요. 시간없고 내용 채운다고 점수 많이 받는건 아니니 아이디어를 짜서 질 좋고 간결한 에세이를 만든다면 더 좋은 점수가 나올지 않을까 싶네요 |