If I have had received a gift of money, I would will buy tickets for a concert and watch it with friends because it is more valuable than buy ing a jewelry for myself. For attending a concert gives me learning experience and chance to socialize socializing, it is worthwhile to buy tickets.
To begin with, attending concert is another way of learning. Concert inspires creativity and helps to develop broad perspectives. For example, many performers practice to share their works with audiences. When people go to concert, they feel the performer's passion. Performer's choreography, fashion, music, and even make-ups are factors that click the brains. After the concert, people also analyze and discuss about it. I think watching a concert is one of great ways to share performer's ideas. People entertain at the same time learn from a concert and it is worth a money.
Moreover, watching a concert with friends enriches sociability. When people go to the concert with the friends, they share their lives as they communicate. If tickets are free, many friends will be interested in going to the concert and make a extra time in their schedule. Since there are few chances to meet friends in these busy days, it is good to release stresses and at the same time strengthen friendship. Furthermore, numerous surveys show that over 75% of people in Korea have seen a live concert. Therefore, when it comes to time when the time comes where people talk about the concert, they will be able to participate in a the conversation and enhance the knowledges in that field.
To sum up, buying tickets to a concert is worthwhile because it gives experience of learning and helsp to maintain friendship.<- Rephrase, Rewording 해주세요 :) Especially when I received money from someone, it is more precious when that gift is shared with others.
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