■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Your Answer :
The reading passage contends that increasing tax on tobacco would have a lot of benefits on society. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up several points that increasing tax is ineffective way, and which contradict the reading passage.
First, the lecturer argues that young people will smoke anyway. In black market, as tobacco's price is higher, retail price also will be higher. In recent studies, there are smugglers and they do not check any kinds of identity so (연결어 필요합니다) young people could buy tobacco easily. This counters the reading passage's claim that youth can (조동사) not afford to buy high price of tobacco, they are less likely to start smoking.
Second, the lecturer asserts that the government will not have the revenue to repair the land or chemicals. This is because fewer people will buy tobacco, so the total sale would be decreased. Therefore, the government does not have money to repair the destroyed farmland and water pollution. This refutes the reading passage's claim that increasing the tax on cigarettes can improve (조동사 뒤에 동사원형) our environment.
Finally, the lecturer maintains that increasing tax provokes the poverty even worse. There is a lot of jobs concerned with tobacco market such as manufacture, retail or so. These jobs will disappear (disappear은 자동사입니다. 수동태로 쓰이지 않으니 참고해주세요.). Then they lose their jobs which even makes this situation worse. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that the government is able to help (철자오류) the poor with this tax, which as a result provides financial assistance.
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. reading and listening의 비율이 너무 listening쪽으로만 치우쳐져 있습니다.
비율은 5:5, 적어도 6:4 정도는 되어야 합니다.
이는 리딩에 대한 디테일 부족으로 이어지며, 분량 부족, 추가 설명 실패 등으로 이어질 수 있으니
리딩에서도 evidence를 많이 찾아서 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다.
3. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*