■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic :
Do you agree or disagree with the following
statement?
Governments should invest in developing
medical technologies rather than in improving public transportation. Use
specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
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▶ Your Answer :
Some
might say it is important to support medical technologies rather than public
transportation. However, I believe it is more crucial for government to invest
in improving public transportation rather than developing medical technologies.
First, it is really needed for people’s better lives. Second, investing in
medical industry wastes a lot of resources and time.
To begin with, development of public
transportation improves the quality of people’s lives. If the public
transportation extends to main points of region, it will reduce much time
caused by moving place to place and people can use the time for sleeping or
having meals with family. For example, five (아라비아 숫자를 지양해주세요.) years ago, I used to ride a bus to go from
my house to Pu-kyeong university and it took two hours to arrive there. It was the main reason why I always lacked sleeping time. However, now, after the
development of subway and bus in Busan, I realized that the time for commuting has far deceased and I can use the time for sleeping. It results in good feelings and higher
productivity and changes my life.
On top of that, a
significant amount of medical investment waste resources and time. Many newly
developed medical technologies are not adapted. Even if the technologies are
adapted, considerable number of medicines and treatments are too expensive to
be used in ordinary homes. For instance, over 10 years, many countries have
tried to solve Alzheimer’s disease problem and made a large sum of investment.
But, until now, there is no fundamental method to cure the disease and some
helpful treatments for delaying the disease are so expensive that most people cannot (줄임말 사용 지양해주세요.) use it.
To
sum up, the public transportation positively influences on people’s lives and
the support for medical technologies has to risk waste of money and time. In
this regard, I think that governments should use money for growing public transportation
rather than medical industry.
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1. 구조를 굉장히 짜임새있게 잘 쓰셨습니다.
바디 1 바디 2의 배분도 좋은 것 같습니다.
2. 문법에서는 관사와 전치사에 주의해주세요.
3. 바디를 각각 두세문장 정도 늘리는 연습을 하셔도 좋을 거 같습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*