■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Actual test 2nd edition, test 4 통합형 문제입니다. 읽기 지문 내용은 congestion pricing에 관한 지문입니다. 3가지 장점이 있다고 소개하고있습니다. 1) makes driving much safer 2) results in a city's public transportation network becoming more convenient to use 3) positive impact on businesses within a city 입니다.
*제가 특별히 궁금한것은 통합형 글쓰기에서 듣기에서 들은 내용을 위주로 쓰게되는데 읽기지문에서 언급한 내용이 어느정도 들어가야하는지 입니다. 액츄얼 테스트 인강에서는 intro와 main에서 각각 ~~이러한 본문내용이 반박되었다 정도로만 서술해도 된다고 하였습니다만 지난번 첨삭때는 읽기지문내용이 더 포함되어야한다는 피드백을 받아서 헷갈립니다. |
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▶ Your Answer :
The lecturer
argues that congestion pricing is not advantageous. This contradicts the
reading passage’s claim that it offers a lot of benefits.
First, the
lecturer asserts that congestion pricing makes driving more dangerous. According
to Australia government 2013, severity of car accidents rose after implementing
congestion pricing. The reason was that people drove faster since there were small
number of cars on the road. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim
that congestion pricing makes driving much safer.
Second, the
lecturer contends that city’s public transportation network becomes more
inconvenient. If a lot of people use public transportation, its capacity will
not be enough to accommodate all passengers. For example, people might have to
wait for their bus much longer because many buses will arrive with full capacity.
This contradicts the reading passage’s claim that congestion pricing will make
city’s public transportation network more convenient to use.
Third, the lecturer points out that reading passage’s
claim saying that congestion pricing has a positive impact on businesses in the
city does not match reality. Actually, revenue of businesses will decline. This
is because, customers living outside the city will be reluctant to go shopping
inside the city because of congestion pricing. Therefore, lecturer casts doubt
on the reading passage’s assertion that congestion pricing has positive impact on
businesses in city.
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1. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
2. 읽기 지문과 듣기 내용은 거의 동등하게 나와야 한다고 생각하시면 됩니다.
리딩을 요약하는 능력 또한 토플 에세이에서 보는 역량 중 하나입니다.
애초에 두 가지 source가 나오는데 한 가지에 완전한 비중을 두는 것은 별로 똑똑하지 못합니다.
3. 동어 반복이 상당히 자주 일어나고 있습니다.
congestion pricing 같이 특정 단어가 굉장히 많이 나옵니다.
동의어와 대명사를 적극적으로 활용하셔서 동어 반복을 줄여주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*