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Some people think that it is not important for families today to have meals together. However, in my opinion, It is essential for family members to have meals together. First, It can strengthen emotional bandages between family members by having meals
To begin with, it has no doubt that having meals together can enhance people's emotional link. To be specific, these days, it is hard to have a chance to meet family members together because of their busy schedules and it is related to a destruction of families today. A research was conducted by a group of sociology majors in Korea University whether regular conversation among family members could effect people's personalities. The former group was composed of people (복수) who meet their families everyday and the latter group was composed of people who do not. What they found was intriguing. The result shows that people of the latter group are unsatisfied with relationships around them.
On top of that, meeting families regularly can help to deal with their problems. What I mean is that people can receive family members' diverse opinions while they have meals and it can be many selective choices that can solve their problems. Also, family members definitely have more experiences than them and it can be a constructional solution for them. For instance , I will take my personal experience to make my point. When I was young, I had fought with my best friend and it was a serious problem. I told
To sum up, it (대소문자 구분) is important for families today to have meals together because it can help to improve emotional relationships between family members by sharing their time with whole family members and it (대소문자 구분) helps to deal with their problems to suggest a idea what they can not think.
In this regard, I firmly believe that it is crucial for family members to have meals everyday together.
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