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The lecturer argues that video game is not main reason for increasing violence. This contradicts the reading passage's claim that video game brings about violence to children. First of all, the speaker argues that video game is not big correlation with violence. The speaker contends that while sales of video game increased, violence did not increase for the same time. This casts doubt on the reading which states that playing violent video games increases situation of bullying and fighting. In addition, according to the speaker, children can learn good things through completing game. The speaker explains that going though next state, children can feel accomplishment and cooperation. So it can develop children's sense of right and wrong. This rebuffs the reading passage's assertion that violent video games rewards acts of violence. The final point made by the lecturer is that young children can distinguish reality with fantasy. The speaker asserts that seven year old children could differentiate between real situation with fake one. This refutes the reading passage's argument that they have difficulties differentiating between fictional life and their own.
에세이 전체적으로 디테일이 너무 없는 편입니다. 우선 speaker from listening이렇게 꼭 적어줘야 합니다. 지금 보면 리스닝 한두문장, 리딩 한문장인데 이렇게 적으면 문장 흐름도 잘 안 이어집니다. 리스닝 디테일 2-4문장 정도 더 필요합니다. dictation 공부 너무 중요해요. 그리고 reading도 1문장 정도 더 적어서 리스닝과 리딩 간의 주장 비교가 자세히 될 수 있도록 해주세요 |