▶ Your Answer : As a myriad of educational theories are exist and many children have different educational background, we should choose teaching methods for our children very carefully. Recently, there are some parents who try to become a teacher for themselves (What does it mean?) because they have strong belief that parents are the best teachers for children. Even though, the homeschooling has some advantages, I disagree about the opinion. I will explain two particular reasons in the following essay.
First, I think it is almost impossible for ordinary parents to cover all the newest education trend. As our society has advanced rapidly, a lot of newly released information have been updated to textbooks. In addition, requirements of entrance examination is becoming more diverse. To be specific, high school students in South Korea should learn over 20 subjects for each semester. (20 subjects? What are they?) In general, common parents are not well educated to teach their children all subjects completely and they do not have qualified abilities to instruct special subjects including music, art, science and so on. On the other hand, in the public education system, each teachers deals with only one subject which is relevant to their university major. All of them are experts and they have a lot of chance to take part in official education training system periodically. It means that public education system is one of the efficient ways to provide both up-to-date scholarly information and professional teaching.
Second, providing that since parents teach their children in only by their own way, many students will lose chance to be assessed objectively. To be specific, in general, many parents have positive prejudice to their children. This will lead to a significant misleading that their educational achievement seems to remarkable, though it does not. In addition, the students are easy to suffer from lacking of competition with the same age group. My friend whose mother tried to teach him by herself is a compelling example of this. When I was a middle school student, the friend had a very positive personality and he was a the person who always try everything enthusiastically. Although, his mother also had very good intention and educational strong belief, a trouble appeared when he took the high school entrance exam. This is because they thought that he had studied appropriately and he had never been evaluated by public examination system. The result of the entrance exam gave rise to severe disappointment to their family, in addition, he failed to enter any high schools near by. I believe that they should not only rely on the mother's education.
I think homeschooling by parents has some subsidiary advantages, but I believe only relying on the homeschooling can bring about a great matter of concern to students. Thus, I firmly suggest that students need to take official education career by public education system because of the reasons as I mentioned told above. This will assure that many students to feel more sense of achievement more stably.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3
| 3 | 3 | Score | Fair 18-23 |
- 글의 구조가 다소 장황하기 때문에 끊어야 할 부분에서 적절히 끊어 다음 문장으로 나타내 주시면 좋겠습니다.
- 불필요하거나 줄일 수 있는 minor한 내용들은 충분히 요약하여 짧게 마쳐주시고, 설득력있는 근거를 많이 제시해주세요. - 또한 homeschooling의 최대 단점중에 하나가 사회성을 기르지 못하는 것인데 이 부분을 이유로써 언급해주셔도 좋을 것 으로 보입니다.
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