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Would it be no problem to say that famous people receive too much attention from the media like newspapers? Although some people claim that it is natural that much attention is given interest is paid to celebrities by media, others point out that the amount of attention from media paid to them is far too seriously much due to media. In my opinion, I would firmly argue that too much attention that famous people get is unreasonable.
To begin with, one of the reasons is that famous people’s lives are interrupted by lots of attention. They suffer from the media’s attention in their lives. For example, many reporters of media trace entertainers to get information about their personal life. I think it can be considered as stalking because they follow and take a photo of entertainers recklessly without their permission. Finally, entertainers would be restricted and interrupted in their personal life due to such acts. In addition, as information is known to many people by media, they get stressed by too much attention. Thus, it would be safe to say that media have negative effects on famous people’s life. Furthermore, another reason is that famous people’s rights to protect their own privacy must be respected. To be specific, they are people who have a privacy like love, conflicts. They may have a privacy that which they want to hide to from the public. Nevertheless, the right to hide their privacy is easily invaded due to rights of others to know.(Unclear meaning) Hence, it would be no doubt to say that celebrities and public figures are entitled to personal privacy. (Give us an example) Overall, it is clear that media need to reduce their attention to famous peoples because they interrupt famous people’s lives and do not respect their rights.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 2 | 2 | 2 | Score | Fair 18-23 |
- 'rights of others to know' 정확한 뜻을 밝혀주세요. - 첫 번째는 특정 entertainer에 대한 예와 paparazzi의 피해를 본사례를 예로들어주시는 것이 좋겠습니다. - 두 번째 아이디어는 구체적인 예를 제시해주시는 것이 좋겟습니다. |
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