▶ Your Answer :Some people worry if they go far away like new city or another country, they might lose old friends. However, I do not agree with this idea. It’s just useless worries. because nowadays there are lots of ways to keep in touch with friends and distance does not affect friendship between old friends doesn’t depend on distance. To begin with, there are several ways to keep in touch with old friends even though there exists people stay far away from one another long distance. Modern technology is well developed for people superior enough to talk to others or watch someone who are far away from each other. For example, 2 year ago, one of my elementary school friends moved to France. Even France is far from Korea and the time is different, we can still talk with our cellphone and computer. We used SNS messages to ask each others’ going and even sent photos. Also we usually meet on computer using face call. These developed tools make us not to forget each other and keep in touch every time, everywhere we want. On top of that, the friendship between old friends isn’t affected by how they are far away from each other. They will never change even they can’t meet that much because of their distance. For instance, I have one best friend who I met when I was 17 years old. After graduating from high school, I went to the university in Daejeon, and my friend went one in Busan. We had to live in a different city. But until now, 22 years old, we are still best friend! Distance doesn’t matter for our friendship because we trust and encourage each other sincerely. If we have such strong and sincere mind through old friends, there’s no reason to lose them.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 2 | 2 | 3 | Score | Fair 18-23 |
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