▶ Your Answer :
There are many ways of making to make decisions while
buying important things. Recommendation from friends and employees, information
from advertisements and personal opinions are impact on people’s choices definitely impact on people's choices. All
of those are highly related to make purchases. If I choose one that is the strongest
influence on purchase will be recommendation from friends. There are several reasons
as follow. is the best choice for the following two subsequent reasons.
Friends who are closer than co-worker they
know every detail of me To begin with, friends know about me well. So, they will recommend things that I would like like the most. Moreover,
friends who already used the product that I am thinking of can give an opinion
of the product like advantages and disadvantages such as merits and demerits. I will be thankful to hear
all of information from my friends and my friends are more faithful than internet
comments. There was a moment that I was trying to buy new cosmetic brand. One
of my friends recommends the product which is made of pure ingredients because
I have very sensitive skin. Thanks to her advice, I can buy the product which
is just fit in to me.
There is another moment that I was struggling
to choose between iphone and android. One of friends who works at electronic
center gives me advantages and disadvantages of two phones. Therefore, I can
compare phones with my interest more easily. Also, friends can give various
opinion on their use. By comparing their views, I was able to think more objective.
If I had to make a choice by myself, then I can’t have objective view on
product. The reason is I rationalize to myself the product is perfect for me,
even if the product is not. Thanks to my friends, I didn’t regret my choice.
For these reasons, I think friends are the strongest
impact before making purchases.
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