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The writer claims that there are some theories which can explain the extinction of sea cow. The lecturer does not agree with the reading passage's theories by contradicting one by one. First, the lecturer points out that sea cow is a huge creature. They are about ten tons of mass and the native Siberian people were just a few number. So they are not likely to hunt a number of sea cows for food. This casts doubt on the reading passage's mention that Siberian hunters who are native are the main reason of extinction. Next, the speaker claims that the hypothesis ecosystems disturbances causes extinction of the sea cows did not make sense. Kelp is the food source not only for sea cow but also whales. However, there is no report about the decline of the number of whales. This counter the reading passage's opinion that the sea cow population declined because of the food shortage. Last, the reading passage suggests that the European fur traders caused the sea cow's extinction. After they arrived, the population of the sea cows significantly decreased because they were hunted by European fur traders. But, the professor disagree with the statement because of the time. According to the record, when European arrived, the number of the sea cows already quiet small. A hundred years before they arrived, the population of the sea cows kept decreasing for some reasons.
점수: 29 지적할 부분이 없는 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에 있어서는 리딩에 대한 부분을 각 단락에서 한 문장으로만 서술하였는데. 한 문자으로 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셧습니다. |