■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : some people think that universities should use their funds to support social activities for students. Other people think that this money should be used to improve food at university cafeterias instead. Which do you think is better? |
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▶ Your Answer : Some people think that university should use their funds to support social activities for students rather than use to improve food at university cafeterias. However, I believe that it is more important that university should use their money to improve food at university cafeterias than support social activities for two reasons. This is because improving food at university cafeterias enables students to save their money and be healthy.
First, using funds for improving food at university cafeterias make students to save their money. Understanding saving money and the potential role of improving food at university cafeterias is necessary to substantiate this view. Most of university students do not have enough money thus, if the university put their money to lowering price of food, students can save their money and put that money to better way. For example, students can use their money for tuition or they can use that money to self-development. In this regard, using funds for improving food at university cafeterias can make students to save their money.
Second, using funds for improving food at university cafeterias enables students to be healthy. Many expert opinion and research statistics contend that if the university using funds for improving food at university cafeterias, it can effect to improve students' health. For example, many university students live apart from their parents when they went to the university. Since making own dishes are very annoy, most of them probably eat instant food which is not good at their health. Therefore, if the university put their money to improve food to be more well balanced diet, it will make students to be healthy.
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