■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree to the following statement ? In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should review the past. Do not use memorized examples. |
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▶ Your Answer : We have learned about our history from childhood and teacher says to me that history helps solving problems of present and the future. In this regard, my opinion is that people should think back to past and apply (목적어가 없습니다.) to their problems.
To begin with, reviewing past makes it more possible to prohibit mistake that occurred before already. To be specific, it helps us to be more effective by checking mistake of past that led (past니까 과거 시제를 써줍니다) to bed situation. To illustrate my point, my father always finds (주어 동사 불일치) solution in the Bible written by ancestor of Israel. as I have noticed, past like story in the Bible recommends some advise to him so he is easy to avoid his mistake.
On top of that, examining past provide us not only with prohibiting mistake but also suggesting useful lessons. To give you an idea, it encourages (주어 동사 불일치) us to improve our intellectual ability by suggesting lessons from many events that have occurred already. For instance, biography of a great person gives us a lot of lessons that we can apply on the present and the future. Thus, if people review the past, many people will save time and energy in order to solve problems of nowadays.
So, all in all, I strongly support the idea of examining the past in order to solve problems of the present and the future. Thanks to the past, we can prohibit mistake and get a lot of effective lessons. |
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