■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Compared to when our grandparents were young, life is more comfortable an easier these days. |
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▶ Your Answer :
If we
imagine that our grandparents were young, some people think that life is more
comfortable and easier these days, while others do not. If I were asked to
choose one, I would like to say that surely, it is more comfortable than
before. There are two reasons to support my opinion as follows.
To begin with,
nowadays people can easily go to another city with more reasonable fees. Thanks
to the development of transportation systems, it is easier for us to move to a
far away area. However, in the past, it (철자 오류) was much harder than these (띄어쓰기) days. For
example, when my grandfather was a teenager, he had to take a bus because of
high price of the train from Pusan to Seoul in South Korea. He had to spend
almost two days moving to a another city. In fact, the train was too late so
that it took also more than one day to go to the city. However, I can go to the
city with just a (관사 필요합니다) small amount of money in 24 hours if I take an airplane. This
change is incredible. After listening to (전치사) my grandfather's story, I realized that
life is easier these days than the past.
On top of
that, no matter where I am, contacting with others is not problematic. On the
other hand, in the past, communicating with people who live in far away cities
or countries was extremely hard. In a recent research conducted by the National
Telecommunication Institute in South Korea, 95 percent of people agreed that
they can easily contact with friends or family even in another
country such as Australia located halfway around the Earth although
there are timetables. The head researcher explained that the invention of smart
phones has (주어 동사 불일치) helped us communicate with others without any discomfort, compared to about fifty years ago. This shows that our life is more comfortable
nowadays rather than the past.
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1. conclusion이 없습니다. 에세이 구성 요소에서
결론은 굉장히 중요한 역할을 합니다.
시간 조절을 잘 하셔서 결론까지 다 쓰실 수 있게 해주세요!
2. 사소한 문법 오류가 잦은 편입니다. proof-reading을 꼼꼼하게 해주세요.
3. 철자 오류가 잦은 편입니다. 심한 감점의 요인이 될 수 있으니, 에세이 작성을 마치시고 꼼꼼히 검토해주세요.
+) 단어를 외우실 때 스펠링을 집중적으로 외워주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*