■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
1. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A
person should never make an important decision alone.
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▶ Your Answer :
It is of
great importance for a person to decide a certain matter in a proper way. For
this purpose, some people might claim that they have enough intuitive to make
an important decision alone. However, it appears that most people agree that the
relevant people should attend in making the significant judgement since it must
have effect on themselves as well as others. I have the same opinion with this issue
and the reasons follow.
First and foremost, it is necessary for a
person to consider others who will have been burdened with the unexpected effects.
For instance, my wife planned to donate a lot of money for veterans (병사를 의미하는 베테랑인건가요?) by herself even
though we had trouble in paying for taxes. Even if it was a good intention, I had
no choice but work (동사 형태) far more than the standards for a while. This example represents
that even though its intention aims to heal (to 부정사) the world, it must result in people
facing another bad situation. Hence, making choice should be considered by the
relevant people together.
On top of that, it is impossible for a person
to be supported with the decision. When a majority of people are included in making
choice, the independent decision cannot be justified. In my case, I decided to
go to China for a trip with my old friends by myself. So, they blamed me with
respect to the one-sided notification. After we shared idea with regard to the
place for traveling, we changed the destination to Canada. It is far harder for
a person to justify his or her decision. Therefore, people should make a choice
together with many people.
In a nutshell, this disputed matter is regularly
brought to mind and still some people may think that they should choose an
important matter alone because it is their life. However, following these
reasons above, it is clear that the decisive judgement should be considered by
the relevant people and many people to make more reasonable.
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부족한 어휘때문에 단어가 반복되네요,,
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1. 전체적으로 자세하지 못한 부분이 많습니다.
예를 들어서 두 번째 문단 예시를 보았을 때
after we shared idea with regard to~
이 부분에서 말하는 idea가 뭔지 구체적으로 설명해주시면 좋을 것 같아요.
2. 이유 두 가지는 합리적으로 잘 쓰신 것 같습니다.
어휘 관련해서는 동의어를 반복적으로 많이 외우시는 것을 추천드립니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*