■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : The issues facing the environment are so complicated that individuals acting alone have no power to affect them. |
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▶ Your Answer : Some people might say it is impossible for an individual to take a significant action when it comes to environmental issues. However, I personally disagree with this idea and believe that individuals can have noticeable impact when working together.
To begin with, small changes can pile up to make bigger ones, which all start with an individual. If people who share their interests in taking action regarding environmental problems can cooperate, there will be a conspicuous improvement. For instance, an oil spill accident in Taean, Korea has illustrated this point. The accident was so huge and severely damaged the sea that the residents there whose living was reliant on it were devastated. This news was so heartbreaking to many people that they decided to gather up and clean away the spills themselves. It seemed impossible at first, however, the end result was, the condition of the area was back to normal, surprisingly clean and undamaged.
Like this, giving attention to environmental issues and sympathizing with them are the first step that an individual can take. My personal experience has demonstrated this to me as well. One day, I watched a video online, and was inspired by it to the point that it shocked me. A girl in the video collected all the garbage she produced for (전치사) the past four (아라비아 숫자 사용을 삼가주세요.) years, which all fit into a tiny jar. I was motivated by this that I resolved to put this into practice, trying to make less unrecyclable waste and move into more sustainable lifestyle. If I had not (줄임말 사용을 하지 말아주세요.) watched the video, I wouldn't have had no idea of how a person can start with small things that ends up having such an incredible effect on other people.
To sum up, individuals can pull together to have greater influence on environmental issues. Beginning from an individual, by informing and encouraging each other, it would definitely make the difference and help the environment.
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