■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : When people consider a major purchase, which of the following has the greatest impact on their choices? recommendation from friends/information from magazines/reviews from online communities |
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▶ Your Answer :
There might be some people who believe that
getting recommendation from friends or information from magazines has the
greatest impact when people consider a major purchase. However, I personally
believe that checking on reviews on online websites is the most efficient way
for the following reasons. First, people can get information from a lot of
people who experienced a product or things they want to buy. Second, online
reviews provide accurate and disinterested views toward the products. To begin with, people can find information
from a lot of actual customers. These days, most of the people around the world
use internet. Therefore, there are tons of information such as reviews of
products. One cannot get such amount of information from friends or magazines. I
know this from my personal experience. I considered buying a car last year.
Before purchasing a car, I tried to get information from friends or books such
as magazines. However, the amount of information was not enough for me to make
a decision. Therefore, I used computer to gain information on online review
websites. There were hundreds and thousands of reviews that were (단수/복수) related to cars
that I wanted to buy. As a result, I was able to get a lot of information on
online platforms and buy a car. On top of that, information on online
review website is the most accurate and disinterested than any other sources
such as friends or magazines. Since most of the companies use their own
website, they provide exact information. Additionally, online reviewers share
their experiences honestly without bias. However, since magazines get sponsorship
from companies, article tends to provide biased information. Moreover, according
to Harvard University Research Center, about 80% of people preferred online
reviews and each remaining 10% preferred magazines and friends. Analysis showed
that the main reason why people relied on online reviews was that they were
able to get more accurate and disinterested information than any other methods.
In conclusion, people can get a lot of
information which is accurate and disinterested through reviews from online. In
this regard, I personally believe that online reviews have the greatest impact than
any other methods when it comes to considering a major purchase. |
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1. conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
2. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
3. 문법은 굉장히 깔끔합니다.
4. 두 번째 문단에서 왜 online reviewers들이
bias없이 객관적인 리뷰를 남길 수 있는지에 대한 이유를
더 자세히 서술해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다.
ex. anonymity (익명성)
수고하셨습니다. *^^*