■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Hasty decisions are never the right ones. |
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▶ Your Answer :
Some people might say that hasty decisions are always wrong. However, in my opinion, rapid decisions are beneficial and necessary for some occasion. There are two reasons. First, it (철자 오류) allows people to grab nice opportunities. Second, it is important to make the decision quickly in medical crises.
To begin with, hasty decisions are advantageous for taking advantage of opportunities in business. To be specific, nowadays society rewards those who act quickly and decisively. As modern society is becoming increasingly globalized and fast-paced, today’s world requires people with promptness. For example, I will talk about my uncle as an example. My uncle, a owner of a gallery, participated in an auction in London Royal Gallery, a few years ago. He is very hasty and intuitive man, so he chose (시제 -> 과거 시제) a painting swiftly and he could get the artwork which become extremely high price now. He said that he is proud of the fact that he decided without any tentativeness.
On top of that, prompt decisions are crucial during medical crises. To be specific, It is evident that there is nothing more important than people’s life. A hasty decision can make difference between life and death. For example, I will talk about what I saw yesterday. On the way back home, I saw a man was lying on the floor of the subway platform (새로운 문장으로 시작해주세요) it seemed (시제 -> 과거 시제) like that he was in a heart attack. Then a woman near him quickly did emergency CPR, it as extremely quick speed. Due to her rapid decision the man could save his life.
To sum up, as a quick decision is tremendously important for opportunities in business and emergencies, it is valuable in some situation. In this regard, I totally disagree with (전치사 필요합니다) the idea that hasty decisions are never the right ones. |
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