■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
|
|
▶ Topic :
Some people prefer to spend their free time
outdoors. Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors.
Would you
prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure
activities? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice. |
|
|
▶ Your Answer :
Some people say that it is better to spend
their free time outdoors, while others think otherwise. There are good reasons behind
the opinion. However, if (대소문자 구분) I were asked to choose one, I would say that I prefer
to spend my leisure time indoors rather than outdoors. There are several reasons
why.
First and foremost, people these days have only
a few hours of free time for their own due to the busy life. So, people tend to
crave for long free time as possible. If you go outdoors, however, considerable
amount of time will be wasted. To be specific, let us (줄임말 사용을 지양해주세요.) say that someone wants (주어 동사 불일치) to
go out for a little swimming for his free time. He has to pack clothes, sanitary
goods, and other stuffs which are needed for swimming. Also, it takes time to actually
walk down or drive on back and forth to the local swimming pool. This extra time
does not need to be spent if he enjoys his leisure time indoor. In contrast,
there are lots of wonderful activity to enjoy indoor, such as reading books or making
a delicious dinner on his own. Those kinds of activities certainly do not take
time to prepare. You just need an interesting book to read, or (연결어 필요합니다) some ingredients
from your refrigerator to start.
Second, there is always a chance of getting
injured when going outdoor for leisure time. For example, my friend, Rosalie, got
hurt while riding a bike along the beach nearby her house. It was her free time in
a very long work. She said that she wants to do some exercise and went out with
her bike to cycle for a few hours. However, she crashed with another biker coming
from different angle. She was seriously injured, so she had to go to hospital and
stay there for two full weeks. There would not be any accidents and getting
hurt if she spent her free time indoor.
For these reasons I mentioned above, I prefer
to stay indoor for my free time rather than going outdoor. |
|
1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼
눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. conclusion의 분량을
3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
3. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
4. during과 while의 용법 차이를 정확하게 숙지해주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*