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Some people might say that, the all business owners think about that is making a profit. However, accumulating wealth is not the only concern for them. There are two reasons for this. First, business owners make jobs for young people. Also, they aim to disseminate their thoughts to the world through their business.
To begin with, many business owners create new jobs by run their own business. Business owners think that the young is their potential customers. In their estimation, if the job seeker cannot get a job, the market will be fallen. This is the worst situation for their business. This why business owners make new jobs for the young. Especially, they hire preferentially the sick and disabled for pay people back. For instance, Lee Jae yong, the vice-president of Samsung, is known to be richest man in Korea. According to his speech, he thinks highly of the future. After he takes over the key of Samsung electronics, they hire a lot of new researchers and invests money for research and development department. He knows the simple answer that making people live well, that is the future for their business.
On top of that, as for some company owners, making profit is not their only goal. Some company owners start business in order to show their philosophy. This is what people call 'business philosophy'. To be specific, some business aims may not to accumulate wealth, but to show their ideology to the world. In this process, money can naturally follow, but we can never say that was a 'goal'. For example, the Italian motor company Ferrari. The founder Enzo Ferrari was a race driver. He always thought about how could he win for the race. Racing is costing a lot of money, as a result, he decided to made race car replicas and sold them to the riches who wanted to be special even on the road. His philosophy still persists today. Some people say that Ferrari does not just sell the car, they sell their winning history.
To sum up, it is negative stereotype to think that business owners only work for the money considering two facts. First, there are many business owners who invests to people for future of their business. Also, running a business is just one way to show their spirit to the world.
주장 좋은데 주장에 대한 설명이 제대로 되지 않은 것 같아요. 조금 더 detail하게 supporting detail을 썼다면 너무 좋았을 것 같습니다. 마지막에 paraphrase한 거 좋은데 spirit말고 조금 더 경영철학에 맞는 단어를 썼다면 좋았을 것 같습니다. 가끔씩 이 단어가 이 문장에 안맞다 싶은 부분이 있습니다. 조금씩 다시 읽어보고 고치는 것도 좋고 다른 사람들이 쓴 글 중에 좋은 표현이나 어구있으면 정리해두는 것도 좋아요
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