▶ Your Answer : When do people learn important things in life? Probably they learn those in various
situations. Some people claim that people learn things better from those at a
higher level because they have more experiences. On the other hand, people
learn many things from those at their own level, such as their fellow students
or co-workers because they are in similar circumstances and they are familiar
each other. A novel "Wonder" by R. J. Palacio and my own experience
support this assumption.
To begin with, the story of "Wonder" shows that people learn
things from those in similar circumstances. The story starts with Auggie, who
is a salary man. When he was 26, he got into a company which sells products
abroad. After getting into the company, Auggie began to get some of troubles on
typing texts. The company was using particular programs, so Auggie felt
difficulty on using them. Thus, Auggie asked his supervisor how to use the
program. However, the supervisor recommended to go to the academy. Auggie did
not have enough money and time to go to the academy, so he had struggled with
his computer. Then, the man next to Auggie, Tom, suggested to have a study
group. Some of workers including Tom had the similar problems, so they decided
to study twice a week. Finally, Auggie was able to do well in his company.
Eventually, this story proves that people can learn things better from those in
similar circumstances.
As the story of "Wonder" showed that people learn from those
in the same situation, my own experience shows that people can learn things
from familiar people. When I was a high school student, I was good at math. One
day, there was a mentoring contest, so I asked my friend to make a team
together. Her name was Seoyoung, who was not good at math. Seoyoung was close
with me, so she wanted to study with me. After starting the studying, I was
surprised because Seoyoung actually got interested in studying math. Seoyoung
and I actively studied together, and we finally got the prize. After finishing
the contest, I wondered why Seoyoung did not study math so far. When I asked
her, she answered: "Before several months, I once asked some questions to
the teacher, but he seemed to be too busy to teach the individual. I felt that
he did not want to spend much time for me. I really thanks to you because you
really taught me friendly." Thus, I realized that people learn better from
familiar people.
In the result, the story of "Wonder" and my own experience
prove that people learn things much better from those in similar circumstances
and familiar people. The story showed that Auggie and his co-workers learned
together because they had similar problems. Moreover, in my experience, my
friend preferred to learn from me because I was familiar. Hence, people learn
things better from those at their own level.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3 | 2 | 3 | Score | Fair 18-23 | - 첫 번째 예시에서 주로 무엇때문에 같은 상황에 있는 사람들로 부터 더 잘배우게 되는지 논지를 다시한번 더 명확하게 언급하여 주세요. - 책의 story telling이던지 one's own experience를 예로 들어 참신한 부분이 있었으나, 주장을 어필할 수 있는 구문이나 예시들이 더욱 필요할 것으로 보입니다. |
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