▶ Your Answer :
There are some people who believe that,
compared to nowadays, life was more comfortable and easier when old people were
young. However, I personally disagree with the idea for two subsequent reasons.
First, an invention of smartphone made people's lives more convenient than before. Second, today's
economic stability and flourish let our lives to be comfortable and stable. To begin with, we can do things what old
generations could not even think about when they were young. To be specific, the advent of smartphone enabled us to live conveniently. For example, we can shop,
search for the information, transfer money, and even study at home using
smartphone. These activities were not available at home when our grandfathers
were young. For example, my grandmother told me that she had to walk to the bus
station to reserve a ticket. However, after she learned how to book tickets
using smartphone, she said that her life had become much easier. Therefore, the
use of smartphones made our lives more convenient. (GOOD) On
top of that, people do not have to worry about facts that our grandparents had
to. Since economic situation is more stable and grown compared to period when
old people were young, economic flourish solved problems that old people had
such as scarce food, high unemployment, and low wages. According to research
done by Seoul National University, 90% of the people who is over 80 years old
answered that the feel more comfortable than there were teenagers. Also, 75% of
those answered that the reason why they feel like that is due to the economic
flourish. Hence, the rise in economic stability made our lives comfortable.
To sum up, the arrival of smartphones and
the increased in economic activity undoubtedly made our lives more comfortable
and easy. In this regard, I believe that today's life is more comfortable and
convenient than the time when our grandparents were young.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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