▶ Your Answer :
Some people argue that being able to work
with other people these days is not more important compared to the past.
However, in my opinion, this perspective is not true for two following reasons
which I am going to elaborate. First, cooperation become more important in the
society. Second, people have to work with global people since today is a global
generation.
To begin with, people have to cooperate
with others in order to work successfully. In the past, there were few
specialists who have in-depth knowledge in one specific field. A person with wider
knowledge were considered as 'an intellectual person', and they solved the problem within themselves, That was why and they did not need to work with other people. However,
today is a specialized society. It is crucial to have one in-depth knowledge to
become a specialist and have one's own knowledge. When people work in the company,
they always cooperate with other specialists. Usually, one big project needs
IT, financial, marketing specialists. Therefore, the sense of cooperation and
being able to work with others becomes more crucial in this society. For
example, one research was conducted by the Korean Employee Assistance Program.
The purpose of the research was to estimate how much employees cooperate each
other when they work. The result was interesting. 30 years ago, there were no
specialists in the company, and employees did not work with other people.
However, nowadays, 85% of the business works require cooperation with other
employees or other companies. This proves that being able to work with others
become more important.
On top of that, today is a global world so There are many things which cannot be solved without other country's help. People
could not contact with other countries in the past since there were no methods.
However, as technology develops quickly, the world has changed to become more globally connected. Therefore,
people have to communicate with foreigners and work together. Foreign language
skills and communication skills are important to survive in this world. A
company, LG, that I work for is a good example. This company was established 40
years ago. At that time, employees did not have to work with foreign people so
they were poor at communication and foreign language. However, recently, they
are all fired. Instead, young generation who are able to work with foreign
people like me are recognized by others and be hired. Actually, I always
contact with foreign company to promote our product and work together. I
believe my Chinese language skill makes me to become more important to the company.
All things considered, I firmly believe that being
able to work with others is more crucial than it was before. Cooperation is the real key to become successful in this society, and people have
to work with other countries to solve the today's problems. Therefore, it is never enough to emphasize the importance of the ability to cooperate with one another.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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FAIR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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1) 업무에 있어서 다양한 분야의 콜라보레이션이 강조되고 있다 2) 글로벌화로 인해 이제는 다양한 국가에서 비즈니스를 진행하는 것이 필수적이다 등 대표적인 이유를 우선 문단 앞에 작성 후 부연설명+예시를 정리하는 것도 좋습니다. |