Some people argue that television must enable people to gain knowledge. However, in my opinion, this perspective is not true for two following reasons which I am going to elaborate.
To begin with, viewing entertainment program can make people remove stress. To explain, having the outlet for stress has meaning in itself. Nowadays, people always get pressure not only mentally but also physically. It can cause emotional problems, health problems and poor performances. In fact, there is no better way to relieve stress than watch funny program such as comedy show. A survey was conducted by UCLA's research department. The survey participants were composed of one hundred current workers, and they were asked that what you do when you are stressed. The result showed that 78% of the participants answered that they watch comedy shows and interesting movies.
On top of that, with watching entertainment program, people can be creative and have innovative idea. To be specific, diverse entertain programs stimulate imagination and inspire people.
On the whole, I believe I accurately demonstrated my point of view on this matter. To sum up, entertainment program enables people to relieve stress and to be a creative person. In this regard, I think television's entertainment can be helpful in the society.
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