▶ Your Answer :
The reading passage contends that the
functions of Antlers <(antlers of what?) can be fully explained by three theories. On the other
hand, the lecturer brings up several points that contradicts these theories this argument.
First, the reading passage contends that the
antlers <(of what?) are used to attract obtain the mates and to establish dominance in competition
for mating. However, the lecturer rebuts the reading passage’s assertion by
saying that deer uses vocalization and body posture in order to establish dominance.
Also, the study shows that the female deer select male deer with small antlers. <(female deer이 male deer의 작은 antler보고 mating을 결정한다면 결국엔 antler로 female deer를 attract하는게 되는것이라고 생각합니다) This implies that it is unlikely that the role of antlers is to appeal to the
mates.
Second, the reading passage states that
deer use their antlers to mark the territory that they control. However, the
lecturer thinks that the reading passage’s statement is not enough to prove it. This is because deer use scent instead of visual marking to mark the territory.
To be specific, deer rub their secretion to the trees and the scent of
secretion is detected by other males. Furthermore, deer rub their antlers to
remove the soft outer skin of antlers rather than create scrape marks.<(이것이 문단의 주제와 어떻게 관련이 있나요?) This
implies that antlers are not do not be used to mark the territory.
Third, the reading passage contends that
the function of antlers is to defend deer from predators. However, the lecturer
is in the opposition to the idea. The lecturer claims that if the antlers were used
to defend deer from predators, they would maintain <(maintain what?) for a year. However, antlers
shed in the winter when deer are weaker and thus they would need protection. Also, female deer protect their younger deer from
predator even though they do not have antlers. This implies that antlers are
not used to defend deer from predators.
Score:19~21 Comment: 내용의 specificity/연결성에 조금 더 신경을 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. Specificity/coherence가 떨어지면 clarity도 떨어집니다. 수고 하셨습니다! |