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Some people think that having friends who are different from oneself is better than having those who are similar to oneself. They may think that it has many advantages for people to make relationships with various friends. However, in my opinion, it is better to have friends who have similar tendency with oneself rather than who have different tendency. This is due to the fact that one can enjoy their hobby deeply together and save time to make a decision. To begin with, friends who have similar inclination can enjoy their hobbies deeply. Generally, similar friends have similar interests. When one and his friend who are similar to him spend time on enjoying the hobbies together, they can share information and materials about it. Therefore, they can understand the hobbies more and enjoy it deeply. For instance, I usually spent my spare time watching movies alone. One day, my best friend suggested me to go a movie theater with him. When we were waiting for the movie to begin, he told me about the director of it and characteristics of his directing. We continued to discuss more about the movies, we found that we both like movies. We had many deep discussions about the movie we watched. As a result, his advice made me understand and enjoy the movie more. - 예시에서 understand hobby in a deep way에 대한 설명 보충이 필요합니다.
On top of that, it helps people save their time to determine something. When friends gather together, they need to decide something such as where they go and what they eat. If friends are different from each other, it takes more time to decide because they have many different opinions. Otherwise, since they have similar thoughts, similar friends can save their time to make a decision. I have an example of my sister. For example, my sister joined in an English club last summer and studied with many club members. One day, they had a plan to go on a picnic altogether. However, they could not go anywhere because it took so long time to decide the place where they go. This is because there were so many opinions. It showed that it was hard to make a decision with different ideas. To sum up, I believe that people should have friends who are similar with them rather than who are different from them because that they can enjoy their hobbies deeply and save time to make a decision.
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