▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that it is not necessary
to always be honest to their friends. However, in my opinion, it is better to be
honest to friends every time, for them and also myself, and becoming honest to friends can work better on trust and reduce stress among individuals. This is mainly due to trust and less
stressful.
First of all, people can trust their
friends who are always honest. Suppose that your friend lies you. Would it be
possible to trust the friend? The answer will be no. (구어체 사용을 지양해주세요) The only key to trust
friends would be to become a honest person. For example, I am always honest to
my friends. All my friends trust me. However, a friend of mine lies sometimes.
So, most of my friends do not trust him at all. Even worse, some of them left
him because he was not honest for them. Without being always honest, I might
have broken most of my friends' heart.
On top of that, it is less stressful for
people because people do not need to make an excuse. Frankly, this issue is
actually like a double-edged sword. It is also true that not to be honest could
be better for a case. However, I believe the advantages of being honest far
outweigh the status of not being honest concerning the fact that people get stresses
from making excuses. For instance, there was a survey conducted by Seoul
National University with students as respondents. The purpose of the survey was
to understand the consensus view of being honest in today's society. The majority of respondents mentioned that being
honest is definitely better than being dishonest. An overwhelming 84% responded that people feel
better when they say truth to their friends. The reason was that lies make
people to be uncomfortable. This survey proves that people have a negative view of
not being honest.
--> 초점을 맞추는 내용이 핑계로 인해 스트레스라고 할 경우 구체적으로 핑계를 만드는 내용에 집중하여 어떠한 정신적 부담이 있는지 상세히 서술하고 이를 본인의 입장과 연결하는 것이 좋습니다.
To sum up, being honest is important
because the trust is the key issue in human relationship, people are tend to believe their friends and people can get rid of chances of getting stresses by being truthful. In this
regard, I firmly believe that not being honest is an worst way for the reasons
I mentioned.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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